Simple and Compound Sentences

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Goals

1. My goals for this term is to be able to go to hot camp.

2. Hot camp is where you work hard and finishing

your work all the time.

Goals for term 2

Mysterious Girl

Mysterious Girl

1966 late at night a girl named Emma

was walking down the street at
11:00 and saw a
Girl standing at the

waterfall but in the blink of an eye she was gone.

At the next day she went to school and nobody

notice her, she was quiet.

Little while later she was walking down

the hallway and

“Boo! Said “Emily. “Hi emily how are you?

said Emma.”

“Good said Emily.”  

Later that night she walk again in the same park

where she saw the girl right beside the waterfall.

She was able to take the risk and hope that the girl

won’t show up.

She walk and walk next into the fountain and

saw a girl crying so loudly.

“She said Are you ok?”  “AHHHHHHHH!!!!

The girl scream said in a Horrifying way”.

Emma quickly ran until the end of the park.

I will never go into that park again.

She now went to her house and went to bed.

Until then she felt coldness in her body and

when she open her eyes the Mysterious Girl

was there Standing in front of her bed.

DUN DUN DUN DUN DUN DUN.

Slime Failure

Check your writing against the checklist below

Recount includes a series of events                                                            yes	y
A variety of sentence structures have been used (simple/compound/complex)	yes
Adverbs have been used (swiftly, happily, etc)	yes
Includes reflection on the event - I felt… because...	yes
Includes at least 3/5 senses (see, smell, hear, feel & taste)	Yes
Includes a variety of punctuation (. ! ? , “ )	Yes

Slime Failure

While the Year 8 are at camp the

Year 7 decided to have some activities

like Slime making.

Me and my group was super excited.

So we went into room 5 and sat down on the table.

It was a big mess! There were heaps of shaving cream

on the floor and glue everywhere.

At that time, I already knew this was going to be a failure.  

Ms Salu, our teacher gave us some instructions,

for how to make slime.

While were reading the instructions

I hear heaps of kids yelling because there excited.

I had to shout while talking to my group.

As so the craziness was over we went of

to get the ingredients,

I got the spoon and bowl and Kelly got the glue.

We were running all over the place to get the ingredients.

Me and Kelly keep on dumping several of stuff in the bowl.

I grab the borax and put in the bowl.

Kelly was shouting with excitement and said “OHHH!”

Its working.

But then it turns out it's just gone thicker.

Suddenly, I stop and think, how come this isn’t working?

In the videos I watch, it was functioning.

So Kelly decided to have a little test of the slime.

Sophia let's try to add some glue and borax together and

see if it worked. Said Kelly. Ok I said.

So we tried that and it still didn’t work we were shocked

and confused.

I think it's because of the glue Kelly said, Maybe I said,  

so we tried several of the stuff to make the slime work.

Sadly it didn't work.

Kelly said I gave up, this will not work. I said why?

Let’s try something else. No said Kelly. So,

I just walked around to see if any of the other kids slime

is working,

actually it’s not only our slime is not working it's all of them.
There just dumb,  

and think that the slime that

they made was fluffy slime but it's just playdoh.

10 Minutes and packing up time, yelled Ms Salu.

So I hurried and just steal some playdoh in the floor

and in the table to save it to myself.

Little while later we sat down in the floor and went off

to our next activity.    

“That's Our Slime failure”

Personification

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